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brigid ([personal profile] brigid) wrote in [community profile] 9chickweedlane2022-12-29 08:45 pm
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Through the looking glass (but not)


12-29-2022

Monday: they reunite after winter break making awkward passive aggressive conversation about gifts

Tuesday: each confesses they would have liked to spend Christmas day together, then takes it back for some reason

Wednesday: Amos confesses? states? that he sneaked away to peer into her window; Edda says that she sneaked to her window to look out

Thursday: I guess they connected via window? So why... the awkward weird.... thing?

"Window Wipers" is a car thing? Why label this "window wipers"?

Amos also looks so incredibly younger than her. Like... he looks like a pre-teen and she looks like a college student. I wondered for a bit if this was a weird memory thing and current-aged Edda is wishing she'd been able to see Amos at the window and bask in his love in fantasy, but she's got the young-Edda-ponytail going on. That's... not good story telling.

But it doesn't read well visually for other reasons, as well. It's not super obvious that that's a window. It's absolutely not clear that she's indoors and he's outdoors. Just... backgrounds would be so helpful.

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