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11/12/2024

A 3 panel strip.

P1:

Lolly and Edda are standing with their backs to the camera, visible from the upper-back up. There is no background/set/scenery.

Edda: "When I asked you what had become of Alistair's shirt, you said "It's none of your business, mummy." That was irritating but entirely true. Saying "Now, where'd that old thing get off to?" was just evasion. Trust me, I know. It never worked with my mother either.

P2:

Amos is standing, visible from the mid thigh up, facing the camera. Lolly has a hand on his shoulder and looks like she's walking.

Lolly: Ohhhhh daddy. You dog.

P3:

Amos looks befuddled, hair mussed, head turned in the direction Lolly has walked.

Amos: What? ................................... Whaaat?

fin.

Right off the bat McEldowney hits us with two of my biggest pet peeves:

1) That an adult in Maine calls her mother "mummy." Look, buddy, "New England" doesn't mean "They Talk Like They're English."

2) Ellipsis abuse. An ellipsis is 3 periods. "..." It indicates a pause, or a trailing-off. For a guy who presents himself as a massive stickler for grammar it's CHAFES that he regularly and routinely fucks up ellipses.

Anyway, the "joke" is that people have sex.

"None of your business" is a complete answer. Why would you say that then say something else? "Where did Alistair's shirt go?" "None of your business. Now where'd that li'l ol' shirt get to?" That's not how people converse.

You know what else people don't generally do?

Congratulate their parents on fucking. Which she did. Just now.

One question is just how exactly did this whole thing flow. Did she and Edda wrap up the conversation, then catch sight of Amos who was staring blankly off into space not paying attention? Or did she, later on, clap him on the shoulder and congratulate him for passively allowing his wife to remove his clothing?

Either way it's understandable why he'd be confused.

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