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1-11-2022

I don't understand what's going on here.

I mean, I know that Elliot gave up on his popcorn quest to launch into an erotic (and energetic) version of the Hokey-Pokey.

I guess he's interrupting her discussing the mechanics of sex? "The building blocks of conception" sure is a weird, clunky phrase to use, though.

Then I guess she realizes that her explanation is ridiculous, possibly harmful? I don't know?

And his last statement... The Hokey-Pokey is better than sex?

I feel like I'm just not GETTING something here, that I'm missing something obvious.

Anyway, although we're seeing Elliot in this little flashback, Juliette was dating a guy named Andy who was also divorced, and who had a kid. We saw him interacting with Edda a very small amount (usually when waiting for Juliette) but we never saw Juliette (or Edda) interacting with his kid. Anyway, here's Andy.
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1-5-2023

I want to note quickly that McEldowney has been doing these "child Edda and child Amos discuss impregnating Edda in flash black format" strips since 2019 at least. I stumbled across this looking for something else. It's 2023 and he's still at it.

These two have only ever slept with each other (probably, McEldowney did some weird weasel thing that implied Edda and Seth slept together but not really but maybe) so who knows what they think is normal.

Before Edda successfully got pregnant, she and Amos had a frustrating and sad time where she just... wasn't conceiving. This is a difficult and stressful thing to go through, and came a few years after she was told she might potentially have fibroids, which can affect fertility. When she finally went to the doctor for a check up (and, amazingly, he took her seriously) she found out that she was super fertile. As is Amos. (His punchline is better than hers.)

So if they were trying for long enough that they're "being brave" about not conceiving (and note: it's RARE that the emotions of someone like Amos are considered in this kind of sad situation), find out they're both super fertile, and then she gets pregnant immediately...

What were they doing wrong?

This isn't like... "Oh, was he wearing the wrong underpants?" "Did she need to take cough syrup to thin her cervical mucus?" "Oh no, too much stress!" "I bet they're DRINKING COFFEE." "Maybe she should be on top."

This is more like... "Is he inserting his penis into her vagina and then ejaculating near her cervix?" "Do they know how to have procreative sex?"

Is he putting something in her, pulling that thing out, putting that thing back in her, then shaking it all about?

Which... actually sounds like PiV sex but weird and why would you share this with a child.

Ew.

I hate this, actually.

I really hate this.

A lot.
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1-4-2022

"The process of pregnancy and giving birth" is a weird phrase. It's a process? Really?

Amos is once again... six? Twelve? His height is fluctuating. He is SITTING DOWN and his height is fluctuating. He's not walking past different things where his body/head/etc need to be drawn in relation to different places and objects. He's sitting. Stationary. On a couch with a distinctive design. And one of his height changes HAS to be there so we can see his face because McEldowney rotates the camera so we see them from behind which ALSO necessitates their speech bubbles crossing. If you MUST show them from behind then surely the last panel, which mentions a secret, is the one to do so?

I don't know what she could possibly whisper that takes only one panel but I bet it's something goopy like "love." Tomorrow adult Amos will reveal this somehow... he'll tell Edda unprovoked, or because she's announced her pregnancy, or because he's thinking about the children or possibly... amazingly... because he's interacting with them. And then Friday will be a talking cat or two people fucking wildly on a piano in front of 500 people who put on shoes and spent $30 each on tickets so they could sit in narrow seats and listen to whichever of the same 5 composers the musicians in this strip exclusively play.

I'm not sure how I'd react if I took the time to put on a bra and pants with a zipper and forked over $30 to spend an evening listening to Brahms on piano and cello while sitting in a seat with thick immovable arms only to have to watch the musicians humping each other or announcing their pregnancy or whatever the fuck else these people do on stage. Unless I knew to expect that. Like if I'm told it's performance art. The pianist announces the composer she's about to play, and her underwear choice, and why she chose it. She humps the piano bench while playing it, her page turner staring down her dress at her cleavage. His eyeglasses fall between her tits. She finishes the piece, stands up, announces the next composer. Her zipper slides open and her dress falls down. Her page tuner pratfalls on top of her and they hump on the floor. He then mounts a unicycle and plays cello while she writhes on the piano.

Like burlesque, but less playful.

"The process of pregnancy and giving birth."

Just such a weird phrase for an adult to use when giving a sex ed talk (??) to the neighbor kid.

THE STUFF

Jan. 3rd, 2023 03:38 pm
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1-3-2023

And we're still flogging the "children talking endlessly about conceiving a child and being pregnant" horse.

There's talk of being pregnant with a baby and giving birth to a baby but no talk of caring for the baby or the child it will grow in to. I want to note that. I want to note that endlessly. It's extremely rare that Edda and Amos are shown parenting their children. There have been more flashbacks featuring Edda and Amos as child discussing pregnancy than there have been strips where they interact with their children, I'm sure of it. I haven't counted, but come on. There's just so many.

This is a project for next time I'm manic.

Even the strips about parenting the children, about being parents, have been abstract things about the IDEA of being a parent. The vibes of it. Edda's premature infants are in the NICU (neonatal intensive care unit) and we get ONE strip of her in a leotard doing an arabesque while visiting them. Then we get a series of strips of her wearing a big sweater, talking about making deviled eggs, telling Amos to cancel his vasectomy, and then seducing him via the big sweater. At one point Edda is dancing and thinking to herself "hold in the tummy muscles" and then collapses to the ground with hearts overhead because she's thinking about her premature infants who are in the NICU. She's not visiting them, she's thinking about them.

(She had a c-section which is major abdominal surgery that involves slicing through your abdominal muscles and moving organs then putting them back in place and stitching the uterus, muscles, and layers of skin back up. After a c-section you're limited as to how much weight you can lift. Sometimes you're told to avoid doing anything as taxing as driving a car. You're not "holding in your tummy muscles," you're recovering from surgery that, again, is major abdominal surgery resulting in a scar that's 4-8inches long. Go get a ruler and look at how long that is. I had a c-section and my scalp is crawling thinking about these details, it's not a fun time.)

I guess in this strip a hunched-over Amos who is somewhere between the ages of, I don't know, 6 and 14 and who grows 18 inches or so between panel one and panel two, is asking about sex. "'N' stuff" to be precise. He doesn't know what "stuff" is although he knows from listening to Juliette that part of "stuff" involves feeling really good - rapture to use her exact word. Because if there's one thing you don't want to talk about with small children (sex, orgasms) it's best to use the word "rapture" to describe it. Talk it up. Sell it. Make it REALLY enticing. Then refuse to elaborate. THAT's how you get them to shut up.

So Amos doesn't know what "stuff" is but he's going to "put [Juliette] in the picture."

What does that mean?

He's going to give her further information?

He's the one who WANTS information. Or he's just going to say he knows what "stuff" is and then she'll know he knows and then he'll ask her questions? Why not say that? Why not say "when I figure out what "stuff" is I'll talk to you again" or something?

Anyway, the position of the speech bubbles is awkward and looks like "deal" should come before Amos' speech bubble. This layout would work better if McEldowney hadn't changed the camera angle for whatever reason.

Her to the left: you're talking about stuff
Amos to the right: IDK what stuff is, I'll ask you later
Her to the left, her bubble under his: deal

Is this the pregnancy talk that she gave to Diane? The one that was so great? Is this why Diane has so many kids?
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12-18-2022

This is the last Sunday before Christmas, with all the room for a large Sunday strip full of detail and extra story. This Sunday strip could feature the two small children of indeterminate age and their preparation for Santa's visit. Maybe they're decorating the tree with their parents, or making gingerbread houses, or making snow men, or visiting their grandmother or great grandmother. Maybe they're wrapping gifts in a hilariously inept way, or learning Christmas carols.

Oh wait, never mind, instead of the actual children who exist in the strip we get a flashback of Young Edda and Young Amos Who Looks Like A Turtle asking Edda's mom what "having a baby" is like.

Now, bear in mind that Juliette had a baby in an attempt to spackle her marriage back together. It delayed the inevitable but ultimately failed, at least in relation to her marriage. She was the ultimate winner in that she got Edda, though. It's a gambit that paid off in the long run. Given her history, her motivation, she no doubt has a lot to say about choosing to have a baby. She could go into detail here, but... no. It's a string of generalities that might work in a stand up routine but it's not quite appropriate for kids, nor does it answer the question.

She fires off a list of potential experiences, which exist of:
Logistics
Decision making
Making the decision
Having sex
Having sex
Having a lot of sex
Getting a positive pregnancy test
Morning sickness
More morning sickness
Looking good
Having sex
Getting large
Experiencing all of this alone while your partner has sex and then falls asleep
Giving birth
Holding your baby

Edda, of course, wants to know about the "rapture" (having sex) park, which Juliette mentions multiple times but then refuses to discuss.

Amos wants to know about the size thing, harkening back to his childhood drawing of a pregnant Edda where she looks like she's carrying a litter.

He has an entire set of subfolders on his computer about inflationism.

Once again, McEldowney would rather dwell on hypothetical babies than the actual children that he's already created, that exist in his comic. He'd rather depict his adult children as small children endlessly discussing having children than depict the small children he's written for his strip.

This is VERY MUCH a pro-forced-birth point of view. Obsession over babies that don't exist, while ignoring children that already exist and need caring for.

This Again

Dec. 11th, 2022 01:35 pm
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12-11-2022

Ah. I see. We're back to two children clinically discussing the amount, and gender, of children they will conceive. One of them mentions the process being noisy which... ugh.

Anyway, the top two panels depict Edda walking ahead of Amos talking while he follows her silently with his eyes cast down, probably thinking about how many quarters he can shove up his nose.
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3-16-2012

McEldowney had his first "Edda Might Be Pregnant" strip in 2012.

She and Amos weren't married, and she was working as both a ballet dancer and a model, two incredibly physically strenuous professions that require being slender. As it turned out, she wasn't pregnant and might actually have fertility issues. Although a pregnancy was completely unplanned, and at a terrible time in her life, she was still deeply affected by not being pregnant. It was a mournful time for her.


5-21-2022

And knowing that it might actually be an issue?


5-24-2012

Personally, I'd prefer if this exchange hadn't occurred during them fucking - especially as several previous strips had been very sweet. But it raises the specter of infertility between a young couple who apparently have everything else going for them.

They eventually marry, enjoy not having children for a while, then plan to have their first baby.

Xiulan and Hugh decide to have a child at the same time, although they don't wind up conceiving until after Edda and Amos' kids turn... two? Six? Some indeterminate age. That doesn't stop McEldowney from making "men are tired from too much fucking" jokes though. ("jokes") (Xiulan and Hugh may or may not have stopped trying to conceive at some point?)


7-24-2019


3-26-2019

It doesn't happen right away, which is pretty normal! But it keeps not happening despite them actively trying including charting ovulation. I do want to point out that most people can't just tell when they're ovulating - some people can feel the egg bursting free but that isn't super pleasant. Usually you tell by a variety of methods including charting your cervical mucus and/or using urine test strips. You don't just suddenly... know. Life would be so much easier if that were the case.

Also the rest of this week involves security guards watching them fuck in an elevator. Let me clarify this: they start fucking in an elevator at which security guards monitoring the elevator via security camera stop the elevator between floors, trapping them in the elevator. Two security guards literally make popcorn and watch them fucking. When their supervisor walks past she joins the security guards in watching two people, who they've trapped in an elevator, fucking.


7-26-2019

I don't know why she'd need to tell him "right after the recital" unless she didn't want to bum him out before the recital. Maybe her period JUST started? Either way this is an incredibly difficult thing to deal with and speaking as someone who's grappled with infertility... it really can be hard to bear up under the repeated disappointment. Every month there's the potential, the possibility, the chance to fall in love with something that might not happen. McEldowney doesn't get into it (thankfully) but apparently she's just not getting pregnant as opposed to having miscarriages.

They both go to their respective doctors and get deemed super fertile. Which isn't how it works and is a really abrupt resolution to what had the potential to be an interesting and touching story line - which frankly is a hallmark of this strip. Any time there's some sort of actual conflict or chance to develop a character McEldowney veers quickly to the side to get his characters back to fucking in a tub or on top of a diner table or on a city sidewalk or something.

She gets pregnant literally immediately afterward. There's no more upset or concern or stress. We, the audience, don't even get to see her and Amos realize it and celebrate. She's just suddenly puking and then at the doctor's office. NB: in Chicago unless you're very high risk doctors won't see you until you're at least 8 weeks along. At least that's how it was with my pregnancies.

It is, of course, twins and they are the most dramatic form of twins possible: Monoamniotic twins. McEldowney spins this as not only dangerous to the twins but somehow dangerous to Edda and at one point she responds to her gravid belly that she won't let anything happen to them, she won't make THAT choice. The implication is that someone at some point mentioned a selective or complete abortion and by golly she just won't do it! It comes out of nowhere, there's no lead up to it, and is from the same guy who has Straw Feminist Abortion-Pushers.

Edda actually being pregnant involves multiple weeks of Amos penning letters to his unborn child/ren about how sexy Edda is as well as a lot of flashbacks to them being small children and talking about having babies/conceiving babies.

Edda, of course, goes on bed rest in the hospital and has a C-Section which is MAJOR abdominal surgery. They literally remove multiple organs before replacing them. A few days later she's in her ballet togs in the NICU dancing.


11-19-2022

Lately McEldowney has been dragging on a months-long tease involving flashbacks to Young Edda And Young Amos Discussing Conceiving Children so we might find out that she's pregnant again in a year or two real-time despite their discussing Amos getting a vasectomy.

Edda becoming pregnant was A Very Big Deal.

There was a lot of lead up to it, and McEldowney obviously started thinking about it back in 2012. Having kids is a big thing for both Edda and Amos. But their journey to conception was entirely about mad fuckin', no actual details about charting ovulation or altering diet or switching up what kind of underpants Amos should wear.

Once she got pregnant there was no actual discussion of parenting or decorating a nursery (or co-sleeping, which is part of parenting). There was no baby shower, none of their friends made a fuss over her. Seth visited her in the hospital and told her how sexy her legs were. That's about it.

Once the infants were born there was absolutely no exploration at all of what it's like having premature twins in the NICU: having such small, fragile babies; having to leave them there and go home without them. We haven't seen Edda or Amos interact very much with their children. They don't read to them or play music with/to them or play with toys with them. Edda and Amos spend a lot of time at the pond at Edda's mom's place, at various swimming pools, and at the beach, as well as at a playground with swings. Their daughters are rarely shown with them. They're like terribly-drawn accessories.

They don't have any parent friends. Their kids don't interact with other kids. Edda doesn't have siblings, but she has cousins. Are any of them grown? Do they have kids that her daughters play with? What about Diane's kids? What about school? Are the girls in school? Or in day care? Or in any sort of classes? Do they have friends of her own? They exist fleetingly to talk about their mom's tits, or how much hotter she is than other adult women they know, or to comment on the sex lives of those around them. They're like a Greek chorus but really pervy and also intensely creepy and wrong-feeling because they're kids somewhere between the ages of four and eight.

Edda's body has changed drastically since her ballet and modeling days, too. Aging does that, no longer being a professional dancer does that, and pregnancy really does that. Being pregnant absolutely fucks you up: it can leave you with a broader rib cage and larger feet. It fucks up your abdominal muscles, as well as your pelvic floor. It can jack up your back. Your body never really goes back to the way it was pre-pregnancy. And this would be SO interesting to see! How does Edda feel about this? What does she do to cope? We see her dancing, still. We've seen her passed out on the floor after dancing (which nobody in-strip sees as an issue?). She apparently plays piano professionally and accompanies ballet classes. What does it feel like to WATCH dancers but not DANCE? How does she feel about Seth, who's still dancing?

Speaking of Seth, ballet dancers, and homophobic assholes who somehow manage to turn gay men straight, how does Fernanda feel about no longer being able to dance due to a knee injury?

Edda and Amos are both professional artists. He's a cellist who also plays piano. She's a pianist who worked as a professional dancer (and model) and is also an excellent illustrator/cartoonist. She most likely sings, as well. How aggressively do they steer their daughters toward the arts? We've seen flash-forwards of their feral daughters both playing piano and dancing ballet. Is that their choice? Do they love it? How strict are Amos and Edda? How do they interact with the parents of other Art Kids? What happens if the kids have other interests... what if they want to play oboe instead of a stringed instrument? Or drums? What if they choose tap dance or Irish dance over ballet? What if all they want to do is study physics?

We'll never know any of this as long as there's new places for McEldowney to depict his characters fucking. Or the same old places. Yeah, that'll do too.

I don't understand why you'd add children to a strip and then do nothing with them... unless the entire POINT isn't the kids, it's the conception/pregnancy.
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9 Chickweed Lane for 12-02-2022

First of all, you might be asking yourself what the big undulating orange thing is.

It's Juliette's couch.


03-12-2012

You can see a great image of the couch here, in this strip from 2012. I like a lot about this strip, actually. The decorative cushions that exist solely to be comedically tossed into the air as Juliette hastens away, Elliot's casual entrance and confusion, The spare background that looks like evening sunlight filtering through mini-blinds. The punch-line's decent, too.

"Massaging his trachea with your thumb," though, has nothing charming or affecting about it. And Edda's teen-aged boobs here are drawn larger than her boobs were when she was an actual teen girl. Juliette looks like a creepy lech as she talks about soft spots and Amos, and "soft spot for your thumb" just sounds weird and like a collection of words. Surely the implication isn't that Juliette routinely stuck thumbs in parts of Amos' anatomy!



Nah, I guess she did.
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9 Chickweed Lane for 12-01-2022

Sometimes McEldowney will abandon a story line mid-week but it appears this is going to keep going because who DOESN'T like watching minors talk about their future fucking and baby-having plans?

Part of what's so disturbing is the way everyone's phrasing this. It's not "if we have kids" it's "if we conceive a child." The focus isn't on the actual child, it's on the act of creating the child by which I mean sperm and egg uniting. Notice that there's also no mention of what they'll DO with the hypothetical baby/kid. They aren't looking forward to having a kid, they're focused solely on sperm meeting egg and creating a pregnancy.

Instead of asking "After marriage, right?" or "But you're getting married first, right?" or something similar Juliette busts out with "Having sworn the bonds of holy matrimony?"

The big reveal is that she has a hand around the back of Amos' neck. She isn't actually strangling him, she only has one hand and it's not against his throat.

But let's talk about these bonds of holy matrimony! Amos and Edda got married in early August of 2017 and that particular story line is abruptly interrupted by a few weeks of rerun strips about how sexy Edda is, including a bunch of pin-ups. This may have been around the time he was hospitalized with a stroke.

Amos and Edda got married in a church after being told that they weren't allowed to elope.

The start the ceremony, and begin making out before they begin reciting vows.

When they do start with the vows Edda abruptly runs off, into the cemetery. She and Amos have a talk about how sexy she finds Amos and it turns out she finds him very sexy. How sexy?



So sexy they fuck in the grass leaving her with grass stains all over her butt and back, a glaring message to every single person in the church that they ran out of said church to fuck.



Did they have hot makeouts involving Edda scaling Amos' body right there in the church, on the predella in front of the altar?



Haha, of course they did! They just went to hump town right then and there. They did it for so long that EVERYBODY LEFT.



They either lingered in the church, which has a window with curtains, or else went to a private room? Anyway, there's usually a gap between ceremony and reception so why are they worried about people wandering off? Are they that desperate for another quick fuck before going out to greet everyone?

Anyway, Edda's got his dick out before he can figure out what they should do with this brief moment of solitude.



Their official wedding photos are post-coital. Also, did you want to know that Amos spunked inside Edda in front of the church altar on their wedding day? Because now you know that.



And it's possible they snuck off to a private room or a hotel room instead of just fucking on the church floor but wherever they were there was a dog because why not.

What I'm trying to say is that their official religious church wedding, thrown together at the absolute last second because her mommy and her room mate wanted to dress her up like a doll and live vicariously through her, was a two-person orgy.

I guess that's the bonds of holy matrimony, the religious sacrament, that Juliette is referring to.

You know.

When you fuck outside the church then inside the church then purchase photos documenting how fucked up and greasy you got while fucking.

As one does.

If I were a real glutton for punishment I'd go spelunking for the strips chronicling the ceremony for Juliette's second marriage, to Elliot. They may or may not be legally married, their ceremony may have been a bizarre farce, but they live together. And they have sex.
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9 Chickweed Lane for 11-30-2022

The problem, once again, is this dialog doesn't sound anything at all like the way people actually talk.

"As it happens, I'm pregnant." "Am I permitted to say whee?" It's not clever or funny or well paced. It's great that he's not trying to imitate, say, Joss Whedon. Don't get me wrong. But his dialog used to flow better. I mean, he ALWAYS used too many five dollar words crammed into overly ornate sentences that wound up obfuscating his meaning about 15% of the time. I say that as someone who just used the word "obfuscating," by the way. Just to point that out. I, also, am an insufferable nerd.

Visually speaking, the strip starts off on a promising. There are two people. They are walking and they are talking to each other. We see both of their faces. They have different face shapes and different hair styles. The young teenager and the pregnant adult have the same body shape though. The writing gets off on the wrong foot, though, in a big way.

"I don't mean to question you so much." This is an oddly formal, and cold, way of putting things. "I don't mean to bother you." "I know these are personal details." "I know this is really intimate." "Sorry for all the questions!"

This touches on that old bit of writing advice to read what you wrote out loud to yourself. Is that how people actually say things? How does it sound to the ear?

"It's just that I've always worried what it will be like if I become pregnant." I automatically typed that as "it'll" because that's how most people talk. Not all! But most. "It's just that I worry about what it's like to be pregnant." "I'm just curious about what pregnancy is like." There's so many ways to say this that sound like conversation, especially conversation between a near-child and an adult.

"I've always worried what it will be like if I don't become pregnant." Now, I want to touch on something here, two things actually, but will save it for later. As it is, this sentence is awful. "I've always worried what it will be like." That just... he tried to set up parallel dialog, or mirrored dialog, and it doesn't make SENSE. "I've always worried what it'll be like" makes more sense.

The second panel we see them from behind for some reason. We can't see their faces. We can't see their expressions. This is a visual medium! They're walking more or less side by side... Edda is slightly in front and Diane has her arms clasped behind her back. They aren't touching, they aren't intimate.

"As it happens, I'm pregnant." Like... you could say "I've worried I won't be able to get pregnant... but here I am! Pregnant!" or "I never thought I'd be pregnant, but as it is, I am!"

Edda responds not with "congratulations!" or "how exciting!" or "Wow!" but with "How is it?" And I guess it makes sense in context because Edda's been asking what it's like to be pregnant but it still comes across as someone observing a specimen. It's detached.


"It's lovely." Ok, that's fine. Not exciting or scary or beautiful or weird or fun. Lovely. Sure.

"Am I permitted to say wheee?" Why would she not be permitted? Why would she say wheee and not congratulations? Why not say it's exciting? They put their arms kind of loosely around each other but it's not a hug. It's not real closeness. They're having this intimate conversation, or at least a conversation that SHOULD be intimate, but their body language is that of acquaintances who've reunited at a church function.

"I've always worried what it will be like if I don't become pregnant."

Diane took religious orders that included a vow of celibacy. Generally speaking, people who are celibate don't get pregnant. Miracles occur, both religious and scientific (surely there's people who are celibate who've volunteered sperm, egg, or uterus to help someone they love conceive and bear a child), and it's possible to have that choice forcibly removed as well and be impregnated against your will. But if you've always wanted a kid maybe don't take a vow of celibacy. That's a big BIG thing to consider.

The second thing I want to mention is that there absolutely ARE people who worry about not being able to get pregnant. There are people who are very upset at the idea of not being able to get pregnant. It's something that isn't depicted that often, especially in a complex way. I don't expect "complex" in this strip, but this is still something I'd like to see touched on in a respectful way.

McEldowney has touched on this twice with Edda. The first time was when she forgot pregnancy tests existed and assumed she was pregnant and was kind of crushed to realize she wasn't. The second time was when she and Amos were trying to conceive and it wasn't working immediately (even though she got a diagnosis of "superfertile"? because that's a thing?) What's frustrating is that the two story lines contradict each other. In the first one, which is longer and more detailed (both in writing/dialog and in actual art like backgrounds etc) Edda's doctor mentions that she may have a fibroid or fibroids which can affect fertility. She's also a ballet dancer and high end model who is extremely active and has a restrictive diet to keep her weight down. This is absolutely something that can and does affect fertility. A young couple who wants to have children but may not be able to is a potentially interesting story. "Whoops nope you're superfertile, as soon as I reveal this you'll become pregnant" is less so.

This "Edda has always wanted to be pregnant/wondered about being pregnant/worried about being pregnant" cluster of flashbacks is so poorly handled and muddled. It's extremely disorganized and unfocused. And it continues to feel like a guy edging toward something trying not to startle it or reveal too much. He's extremely focused on pregnancy and Edda being pregnant and that keeps leaking through whatever other story or fuckfest he's depicting. Like we get this incredibly jumbled nonsensical time travel anomaly thing that wound up mostly revolving around Edda's hot teenage daughters telling her that she's hot and then we're... doing flashbacks of child/teen Edda bullying Amos into promising to knock her up one day.

What I'm trying to say, once again, is that McEldowney either has a general pregnancy fetish or else it's specifically about Edda being pregnant. It has that furtive quality to it that his week long public toe-sucking story line completely lacked.

It almost feels like the foot fetish spotlight was to distract from the pregnancy stuff.
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9 Chickweed Lane for 11-29-2022

Nothing in the layout of this strip, of either panel, is good.

The order of dialog very much should dictate the layout here. In both panels Edda speaks, then Diane speaks, then Edda speaks, then Diane speaks. In the first panel Diane's speech bubble is further to the left than Edda's speech bubble; in the second panel the tails of their speech bubbles cross each other. This is confusing. There's no flow to these two panels, to the dialog!

There's also no reason to focus on their upper bodies (as represented by the back of someone's head and her back, and turned face and back of the other person) and then on their lower bodies.

The pacing would work so much better if they were just... strolling from left to right in both panels.

Or even, say, seated some place with their dialog over the space of one long uninterrupted panel.

If a comic strip like this isn't clear then it fails as a comic strip.

This isn't some "oh you missed a detail" or "you didn't understand a word" or "you forgot this bit of history" or "you can tell these similar characters apart by these details you overlooked."

This is a messy layout where the dialog doesn't flow because it's poorly laid out.

And it's sad. Because "You have a mother you can ask these sort of questions of; I did not and had to turn to your mother, who was helpful and kind" is interesting. It... doesn't exactly make sense why her child's former school teacher would turn to Juliette for this kind of... really intimate information and advice. But I suppose you could chalk that up to Main Character Syndrome.

But the jumbled speech bubbles, the absolutely unneeded leg shot, the complete lack of background... seeing the back of someone's head as she engages in conversation! It's poorly planned, poorly laid out, and poorly executed.

Also McEldowney apparently forgot that Edda's skirt is green and red plaid in the second panel.
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A former religious Sister and a school girl discuss pregnancy
9 Chickweed Lane for 11-28-2022

The first thing I want to note is that Diane has more of a distinct face than most of the female characters. It's thinner, she has cheekbones that narrow down to a defined chin. She has weird hair, too. Is it gathered in a low curly ponytail or messy curly bun? Is it pin straight until it reaches the nape of her neck at which point it curls like whoa? McEldowney knows how to draw curly hair, as demonstrated with Isabel Florin. Her hair style has always puzzled me.

Anyway, Edda was an adult when Diane left the Sisterhood. Note that she was never a Nun - she was not cloistered. She was off the world, she taught at a day school, she went grocery shopping or whatever. Francis was a Priest, not a Monk, and Diane was a Sister, not a Nun.

Edda was an adult, living on her own in New York, when her former teacher popped up.

She's probably about ten years older than Edda is. she was a professional teacher when Edda was still 13 or 14. If she had her bachelors of education and was fresh out school she'd most likely be 22 or 23. If she had her masters she'd be 25 maybe. Add at least 2 years of experience though because while she was depicted as young she wasn't depicted as insecure - she was always in control of the classroom and confident in what she was doing. So let twenties, early thirties.

The two immediately started chatting like they were good friends and equals. It might be weird to use the term "equals" but Diane had previously been in a position of authority over Edda and that sort of thing usually carries weight even after the hierarchy has changed. Edda didn't respond to her as a former teacher, but as a pal... even though they weren't shown being especially close while in school. It felt a little odd then.

Here it's even odder. Edda is depicted in her high school uniform, which is identical to her grade school uniform, with her high school hair style. She's a minor in this depiction, talking to an adult about being pregnant. McEldowney is entering the second week of a minor discussing her desire to become pregnant and have children - and this is a story line he's pursued before. Edda's been talking about this, and specifically having children with Amos, since she was a small child.

McEldowney has some THNGS to work out regarding pregnancy and by GOD we are going to witness him grappling with them.
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9 Chickweed Lane for 11-23-2022

"Legs don't work like that" could be the title of most of the comics for the the last fifteen or so years. Her legs in the second panel really do not work like that, though. Not like human legs, anyway. Not like her sexy sexy young teen aged (pre-teen?) legs work in the third panel.

LET'S DISCUSS.

In the first panel, Amos states:
First, I feel I must get accustomed to the whole idea of what we must do as potential parents.

He goes on to ogle Edda and then be humiliated for his ogling.

But he doesn't say "what we must to to become potential parents." It's "what we must do as potential parents." Your mileage may vary, but generally speaking when I hear people say "what we must do as potential parents" it involves, like, health checkups and discussing finances. Here his eyes go straight to her barely pubescent chest, then drop to her legs... which is how McEldowney has treated their parenthood. It's one long string of fucking interrupted here and there by other people fucking or by their young children commenting on people fucking.

And speaking of pubescent two days ago McEldowney portrayed Edda as a small child who was maybe six. I assumed that yesterday's strip showing them both looking older was mostly him just... being bad at drawing little kids. But no. Has this conversation been raging for a decade?

In the second panel Amos is framed by Edda's oddly elongated body. His eyes are pointed at her chest. which is above what looks like two abdomens stacked on top of each other that terminate in some extremely long legs. I'm trying to envision her standing and it really isn't pretty. McEldowney could do amazing body horror if he really leaned into it. But the audience's view is pointed at Amos which is framed by Edda's body. We follow his line of sight to one of her erogenous zones.

The third panel features Amos and his giant head starting at Edda's very well drawn thighs and knees, shapely calves, etc. It's very obvious that THIS is what McEldowney lives to draw because he forgot to finish drawing the chains on Amos' swing. Also Amos looks like a turtle. You know all those memes about Mitch McConnell? Move over Yertle the Turtle, Amos is here. I guess it's a change from looking like Moe Szyslak, although I don't know if it's a welcome change. Her legs are the main feature of the panel: a splash of red against white with a bit of black.

The fourth panel reveals that she's bored of his attentions, he's been staring at her a while, she's ready to discuss the finer points of IUI or something, I don't know.

McEldowney is really hammering home the idea of these two always being hot for each other and always being interested in having kids together even when it contradicts decades of writing. I'm surprised that present-day Edda and Amos haven't had more kids, though. Looking through the way he wrote Edda and Amos during her pregnancy arc, which included Amos writing letters to their unborn children about how fucking sexy Edda is, I almost suspect that he's got a pregnancy fetish that he's trying to hide unlike his leg fetish. He might just have a Madonna complex where pregnancy is Saintly and Holy and Beautiful and the only way he can show he finds something beautiful is to portray it as sexy and that's why the former sister has had so many kids she can't remember all of their names (punchline used more than once).

I might post and comment on the "Edda forgets that pregnancy tests exist and convinces herself that she's pregnant and also abortion is so BAD and EVIL that a RANDOM FEMINIST has to show up to urge Edda to get an abortion OR ELSE." It includes Seth threatening her about keeping the baby. (Speaking of, he's well established as wanting kids so, again, I expect to see Fernanda pregnant any day now or else they'll be shown Grappling With Fertility. I do wonder what McEldowney's stance on IVF is. I bet we disagree about it!)

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